Quote Originally Posted by Hoborobo View Post
Good catch, it's fixed now. They were barefoot in the first draft of the story, then I decided to give them fur boots because 1) it's cold and 2) two girls fighting wearing nothing but fur boots is hot
I agree that two girls fighting with nothing but boots on is hot, though we are not there yet in the story! But it also occurs to me that they are almost naked - being cold isn't really a factor! So, let's just go with girls fighting naked except for boots is hot! ;-)

It was not a hard catch for me. When I read well-written stories like this, the picture unfolds in my mind's eye and a good description is essential to that. I've had stories nearly ruined for me because the author doesn't describe how the characters get from one stage of undress to the other or is inconsistent or difficult to follow in the description!

Hope the next part is up soon.

JB